Hi Yuppie, I hope you don't mind comments on your english. While it is normal to write in a casual way on the forum here, and in emails etc. your C.V. should have impeccable grammar, and although I don't want to sound picky, it is an important issue for anyone who reads your C.V..
A natural entrepreneur who has always dreamt big has lead to an inevitable commitment to become a financial market trader.
"dreamt big" doesn't sound nice, and the sentence itself doesn't actually make sense. Why say dreamt big, when you could explain that you are ambitious/driven/whatever. And why would that be inevitable? There are lots of careers you could choose.
Strong quantitative abilities matched by an exceptional sensitivity to detail provided a structured initial approach to the markets. Firmly gripped with a passion for the markets while able to maintain a social life provides a healthy, sustainable balance for progression to become a top trader.
Again, maybe it is just me, but there seems to be a tense problem here. The word "sensitivity" doesn't sound quite right. I know what you're trying to say, but it is not being put across in the way you would like. I don't like the "top trader" part either.
SKILLS
Communication & Team-working
- Led the design and build of the mechanical aspect of a group project during my 3rd year of university. The group received special recognition for the mechanical design of a device for sorting various-sized balls. The recognition received was due in large part to an admirable cohesion between the group members during the 9-month project.
- Ability to get along with everyone in all environments is often commented upon.
Again, saying "get along" is a little bit casual, and not really strong enough. I am not a headhunter, nor an expert in C.V.'s although I do see a lot of C.V.'s in my work. If I read your C.V. I would have the following reactions:
-Language not quite correct (mentioned above).
-Strong technical skills/computer programming, but doesn't sell this enough In particular not enough mention of practical/work experience using these skills.
-Good education
-Too many comments about irrelevant things
"healthy ... balance...high level of fitness and healthy eating...A strong subscriber to the healthy body – healthy mind school of thought...Recently trialled a strict Vegan diet for 6 months to observe potential physical and psychological benefits...Enjoy running, swimming, weight-training, cycling and playing squash. Derive substantial physical and mental benefits from this that help maintain a balanced mindset for progression toward goals...A reasonably active social life ensures a good work/social balance. This helps to ensure no form of burn-out occurs with personal endeavours"
When I write it all out like that you'll see it is overkill. They're unlikely to be interested in any of that. There are other things that you mention that you could probably do without too. Again, I hope you're not offended by any of these comments, but better to get it fixed now than send it off.
You do have good technical skills. You have experience of programming, working on algorithms and leadership skills. You are numerate and have a passion for trading including experience with trading your own account. You're intelligent, educated, easy to work with and a problem solver.
Some of these you convey reasonably well, and some of them you don't. I'd say it needs a lot more work so that you sell yourself more.
